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Pony Savagely Beats Commie
Anonymous
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Who wants to see a fanfic in which, halfway through chapter one, my donut steel OC debates Glimmer and then kicks her ass when she attacks him?
450 replies and 201 files omitted.
Anonymous
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https://www.fimfiction.net/story/224996/6/silver-star-apple-and-the-search-for-more-money-love-the-meaning-of-life-and-magical-cards/6-the-first-and-final-sentence
Here's the chapter, skip the part where Twilight and one of the OC's "totally-not-shadow-clones" date.
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>>3544
>Who wants to ... ?
>crickets
>Here it is!
Anonymous
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>>3546
It'd be funnier if that was the case, but to be honest, I just forgot to post the URL in the first post.
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>>3544
You literally just made a thread about exactly this story and exactly this chapter. Why do you insist on making several threads about one singular fanfiction and then complain when we tell you to get off the stage?

Welp, since you blocked me and called me a librul, here's my reply here, shitstain.

>calling liberals liberals
You've been calling the entire board liberals in every thread I've seen you in. You know, /mlpol/, the nazi horsefucker board dedicated ENTIRELY to the intersection between nationalism, weeaboo culture, and MLP? Clearly we're all liberals who just don't get your genius.

>makes you a dumdum at fanfics and politics
Your reading comprehension game seems pretty off. I told you once and I'll say it again: all I'm saying is that your ego's overinflated and just because you can write things doesn't make you god's gift to literature, and you should stop making several threads about your stupid fanfictions where they aren't welcome. But because you're so high IQ from your Rick and Morty watching, you see "doesn't make you good" and took it as "makes you bad."

I see another thread on the site too. What a shock. Get off the stage.
Anonymous
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No.3549
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>>3544
>>3548

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WktqPi0SieY

>its another "Nigel makes a masturbatory thread about his shitty fimfiction." - thread.

Lone15
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>>3544
You're cute.
Anonymous
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You know what the real sad thing is? If Nigel wasnt such a self-felating shithead spamming the board with 10 threads and was in reality capable of improvement based on criticism things could have turned out a lot different.

He could have made a big fiction thread where people could read, discuss and post about the subject, generally improving board quality and eventually becoming a site staple where people post quality selfmade literature, maybe. I am pretty sure people have suggested something like this before.

But we all know this is not reality, Nigel chose the low road. And now every shitthread he makes about himself will end up like this. Much like CWC, Nigel never actually listens. He makes threads about himself to get attention. And he will get attention. But not the kind of attention he was fishing for.

Anonymous
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>>3551
He unironically helped pay for four hours of Leddit time, until he was suspended.
His account was a minimum of 19 months old before suspension.
With previously mentioned server time money as a minimum amount.
I tire of making fun of him though, overall boring, except the Ben10 stuff, but mods are based (may spank).
Anonymous
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>>3552

You seem to have deep insider knowledge about Nigel and his exploits. Compared to you, i am barely at surface level. I strongly suggest you hold onto it until he goes off the rails again. Dont let it go to waste. I am sure third parties like kiwifarms and the likes would love to get introduced to the exceptional specimen that is Nigel.
Anonymous
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No.3554
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Nigel's the guy on 4chan who has some program set up to get triggered when someone posts an image that's also on Derpybooru, so he can get triggered and call any MLP fans his program detects a "Barneyfag", yes?
I don't see why you're repeatedly trying to forge a connection between me and the alt-right. I mean, trying to forge a connection between me and some guy you don't like.
Really, what do we have in common?
I thought the whole point of anonymous discussion was that losers like captain Vril Society Flag over there can't bring their identity-politics "I believe this man is a bad bad man because x! Now I will give him a derogatory name and call his posting here a sad thing because reasons!" nonsense.
What happened to discussing ideas, instead of people?
I didn't expect a site called /mlpol/ to be so in love with SJW tactics.
Anonymous
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>>3548
Now comes the part where you say I'm "literally calling you a lurral" for calling you out on your dishonest use of SJW tactics to shut down discussion and brand me with this "Nigel" label.
Come off it. You and your backup buddies have told me how you "feel" about what you think I am and who you think I am, but you have yet to make an argument.
Anonymous
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>identity politics
>SJW tactics
So how's 2015 this time of year?
Anonymous
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>>3556
To use the vernacular,
>a fucking leaf
Anonymous
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>>3557
That's Mr. >LEAF to you, shitbird.
Anonymous
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>>3556

Anonymous
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No.3560
>>3559
Oh the humanity
Anonymous
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No.3561
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>>3554
>not knowing the 4chan terminology that British flag = Nigel
>thinking that we don't like the alt-right or that we're pushing you together, when in reality you're posting in a place where everyone here is further right than you and is sick of your normie shit and would rather compare you to a nigger than their political ally
>touting horseshoe theory like Sargoy of Cuckad
>accusing people who rightly tell you to go back to reddit or quit shitting up the board that they're JUST LIKE THE LIBERALS SILENCING THE POOR INNOCENT MODERATE CENTRIST WHO DINDU NUFFIN RONG

>after all this, after several threads, you still post about your stupid goddamn fiction, not even bothering to use the thread DEDICATED TO FANFICS AND IMPROVING YOUR WRITING
>missing every single social cue you've come across since revealing yourself by your fimfic name, and yet pretending to know anything about the /pol/sphere by using the leaf meme

Just. Fucking. STOP.
Anonymous
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>>3545
I was very interested in this part.
>“What is, ‘Poser’?”, She asked. “It means ‘Faker’,” He explained, and she smiled and nodded in understanding. “He was a loser who pretended to be cool. But he was terrible at pretending. So he looked very, very lame and uncool.

It's strange to me that you know this, but don't have the self-awareness to figure out that you're being one with your constant self promotion of your fanfiction here. You come across as, and I think I speak for everyone here when I say this, a self absorbed faggot who thinks he's making an observable difference in the world by beating them gosh darned SJWs in a piece of fiction, fanfiction starring your self insert as a pastel horse at that. Furthermore, you've gone and lumped Fascism in with Marxism betraying a lack of understanding the differences between ideology and governmental structures.

Since I'm pro autocratic as fuck, let me educate you, Fascism is a form of government where all powers are concentrated into one person, or group of people which are still nominally elected in some manner as opposed to Monarchism where right of rule is inherited. Marxism is an ideology which preaches communal ownership and complete lack of any kind of government, Communism. Real Communism has never at any point been achieved in the real world because it's fundamentally at odds with human nature, the closest anyone has ever come to implementing it is Socialism, which operates under similar rules, but everything is owned and operated by the state which is an evil all its own as the ruling party is typically well looked after due to their status while literally everyone else is treated as a disposable underclass, ie Stalinist Russia, or Russia at any point under 'Communism' really.

On a side note, it was unbelievably difficult to read even as much of your story as I did due to its self insert nature, it may seem good to you, but no one else is really going to enjoy reading about how you single handedly saved the world and how great your self insert is. Now, I'm going to politely ask you to stop shitting up our board with your attention whoring, no one really cares about your fanfiction and to most it seems like you're trying to employ us as your personal army to get your upvote dopamine hit, that shit's not good for you Nigel. Rise above it.
Anonymous
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>>3561
So british flag means Nigel now? Why say it like it means "Person whose opinions I don't like"?
By the way, how do flags work on this site? Do you use your real flag until your post count rises high enough, and then you get to "rise through the ranks" of fictional empires until you get to the coveted Equestrian flag? Sure, because post counts and other status symbols don't go against the point of anonymous free discussion of ideas at all.
>>3563
That part was inspired by one asian person I know who starts momentarily talking like that upon encountering a word she doesn't know the meaning of. I'm not sure why you'd fixate on it in a fic where one cartoon horse beats the shit out of another and then rips off a certain scene from a show I'm guessing you haven't seen. Why mention that scene in particularly? Was it where you stopped reading? Is it an inherently posery, fakery, uncool cringey mega-lame un-self-aware naff thing to write a fanfic like this? If so, I'll keep that in mind. See, you aren't my target audience, even if you are one of those entitled cringekids. So why should I care how hard or easy reading my fic is for you, if you don't have anything intelligent to say about its content? You aren't paying me to write something "everyone" will enjoy.

Putting the amateur hour criticism of my work aside and moving on to your personal attacks, I'm not """constantly promoting""" my fanfic, but it would make for a more interesting and less irrational conflict if I was. The SJWs here are back to the "shouting buzzwords" phase, because the purple flag kid's attempt to dig through my reddit post history and find something to use against me failed. One of them decided to mention this out-of-context in another thread, hoping to start "le board drama" by getting confused people involved. God, could you kids be any more transparent in your attempt to shit at a wall and blame it on me? I think I saw a meme about that behavior from some Glimmer-fanboy raiders attacking this place a while ago.

Rise above them, "le 51% face".
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>>3564
>amateur hour criticism
You really don't see how pretentious it is to stage a debate about Marxism in a piece of fiction where you control both debaters and the crowd? It's tell and not show and that's what makes it bad, but if you want to just ignore the few legitimate criticisms you're getting, more power to you.

>I'm not """constantly promoting""" my fanfic
Perhaps not, but you have made a number of threads about it and your fimfiction page, and every time, someone has told you to fuck off. If you don't care that you're not writing for every demographic, then you must realise that no one here is among your target demographic. At the very least you'd post your shit in an existing thread, but your ego seems to be inflated to such a degree that you believe it deserves its own special thread everytime you choose to post about it. That's actually what bothers people the most, all the threads are just about you specifically, if you changed the format to a thread about fanfiction in general and then plugged your own in it to get things started, you'd get a few people calling you out for the self plug, but at least there'd be a wider topic up for discussion.

Also you must be new here, it's because Nigel is a very British name, if they were trying to insult you properly, they'd be calling you Mohammad because England has been turned into Britbongistan.
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>>3565
>Britbongistan
First time I've heard that particular name. I'll stick with Bongistan, I think.

>>3564
Nigel, I'm not going to argue for or against you or your fanfiction. Frankly, I like to keep politics as far away from everything else as I can, and that includes fanfiction, so I don't think I'll read it. Instead I'm going to explain in no uncertain terms why everyone keeps shitting on you. What you do with this knowledge is up to you.

The answer?

Nobody really cares. That's the entire reason you keep seeing "Es Jay Double-Us" telling you to fuck off. Nobody cares, and yet you keep making new threads for every update on the fanfiction very few people here are going to read and taking up space on the front page. If there's anything you should be taking from arguments like >>3565 it's that this should all at least be confined to its own thread, preferably a thread dedicated to general fanfiction and writefagging.
Anonymous
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>>3566
>>3545
>I like to keep politics as far away from everything else as I can

I don't particularly favour politics in media or at large, but the real problem is found in contemporary politics and other 'contemporary' issues/struggles/events used in media.
These are ideas that are aged before even being written about. Very good way to make a piece of media age poorly, most ideologically motivated leftist directors tend to simply not consider this.
Politics in media is better given way to the timeless concepts or conflicts. They work far better as subjects.

If anything the only problem I have with this particular fimfiction-chapter -thing- by Silver is the fact that Silver is the kind of person that thinks everyone who argues with him is a le libturd, that or he (very consistently) seeks to 'compare' the people he argues with to epic sjaydoublejoos whom he believes he b t f o-s.
. I mean just look at >>3563
He just can't -not- fuck things up and it's blatantly apparent from the way he acts, so surprise-surprise when he fucks something up.

>reaches for a horseshoe tier comparison
>socialism is literally right there
>...
>muh facism and marxism

DIE BARBIEFAG. THIS IS YOUR MINDSET!
Anonymous
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>>3567
B-b-but antifa are the real fascists! Democrats are the real racists! ^:)

Squeaking in the distance grows louder with every post from nigel.
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>>3567
Vril I'm confused, are you calling me a barbiefag or him, where the bloody fuck did eqg enter into this?
Anonymous
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>>3569
It's supporting evidence HE is the barbiefag! He must die for bumping into me on the street once and calling me a faggot on Fimfiction!
Anonymous
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>>3564

Good News, Nigel!

I build you a personal "What If" Machine!

Now you can see how your life turned out if you were a little bit less of a human failure, which fame, money and women!

Let me get my finger enlarger...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rVX4dMpNOyQ
Anonymous
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>>3568
>Obvious SJW lets "his" mask slip
Anonymous
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Alright Nigel, lets talk. This Fic is shit. Its full of overly used, obviously plagiarized, obviously sourced, and none-of-it-original material, themes, and ideas. Not only is it all of those things, its simply not good writing.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-mare declared, appearing behind Twilight with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-Mare declared, appearing behind Silver with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-Mare declared, appearing behind Silver with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-Mare declared, appearing behind Silver with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-Mare declared, appearing behind Silver with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.

“Daga kotowaru!” The Dragon-Mare declared, appearing behind Silver with a mouth full of flames.

“Nothing personal, kid!” Silver announced, appearing behind the Dragon mare with his Spellblade out.


Quality stuff. If anyone is wondering, that is entirely unmodified. That part happens while Silver is engaged in a Naurto fight early on. There's no point to the fight, other than to attempt to establish how much of a bad-ass Silver is. Oh, this goes on while Silver is taking Twilight on a 'not date' (and yes, of course she wants him). I should also mention that the dragon mare tries to hit him with a Kamehameha, which he counters with a "Hamena Hamena". Real shit.

"No one being will be allowed to get mad at her, and nopony that gets mad will be allowed to stay mad at her, unless he or she is the bad guy in this character’s ‘Story’, either temporarily or permanently. Her backstory will make little to no sense, as if she just popped out of the blue one morning and made something up on the spot when questioned. It’s like reality is a game of Walls and Warlords, and the Dungeon Master made her own character, and gave her the coolest – and most sympathetic – backstory she could think of, plus infinite stats in everything that matters to the writer. As if the writer is doing that thing where rather than establishing things about the character, or influencing the character and his or her goals and worldviews, the backstory exists to impress potential fans. Long-lasting relationships will dissolve and romantic partners will treat each other awfully or die, all for her benefit. Miraculously powerful items will violate whatever normal cycle of inheritance they would normally have and fall right into his or her lap. Impossible abilities, impossible improvement rates, all with no justification. It’s as if this anomalous entity emits some kind of mind-altering field that forces others to react how the anomaly wants. The universe loves her, and can’t give her an adventure that doesn’t paint her in the best light possible, even if it seems unnatural, even artificial."

I'm sure there are plenty who will appreciate why I included this piece. This is the part where two of Silver Star's Shadow Clones 'Silver Spares' are watching another 'Spare' who is having a discussion with Starlight Glimmer. And just in case you're wondering, of course he can use the 'Spares' to learn at an accellerated rate just like Naruto! And if you're wondering how such a technique exists in ponyworld, its cuz he made it! Oh, he's also a world class martial-artist. And he's got some sort of weird technological device that allows him to fly at a speed that caused Twilight to have to keep up.

And an insufferable, selfish, arrogant little ‘I am smarter than you, only I am right, only I know what is best for all, and any who seek to oppose me are wrong’ attitude. With a heaped tablespoon of ‘I am what I am and wanting me to change that is wrong’

^:) I must admit, I only got halfway. Apparently he gets invincible when he's angry; "Old Pandarian secret". He's also a billionaire. I'm sure it gets much better tho after I stopped tho.

Tl;dr "Silver Star" (the OC) has successfully out Mary-Sue'd Glimmer, with absolutely no respect for any characters in the MLP world, at a HS Freshman writing level, and (you) don't like it cuz you're an SJW leddit glimmernigger libtard.

>t. SJW leddit glimmernigger libtard
If only You knew how bad things really are...
Anonymous
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>>3573

Jesus Christ.

Its one thing to shill a shitty fanfiction. Its another one to not shut the fuck up about it until its done like Nigel does. But this? A self-insert OC shitfiction? This is bottom of the barrel tier sjw tumblr tier. this belongs in a deviants video. I cant wait to see the trainwreck that will be his Pokemon game. This spells disaster with every word.
Anonymous
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>>3573
After reading that little bit of analysis, I went ahead and tried to stomach the chapter for myself. I think you really undersold the shit factor, if I'm being completely honest.
Well, if nothing else, this trainwreck makes me feel so much better about the self-insert South Park fanfiction I used to write as a HS freshman myself.
Anonymous
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Whoooooo boy, that last half of the story was something special. About ¾ of it were made up entirely of the author's self-insert monologuing about his e n l i g h t e n e d ~ anti-ess-jay-dubya, standard-issue Liberalist® 'ideas', against a completely OOC Glimmy who gets put under a 'truth' spell; or as I like to call it, the '+5 Curse of the Strawman'. Everyone surrounding him during his e u p h o r i c ~ "debate" with Glimmy was of course cheering him on, mind-controlled by Silver (with nary a hint of irony in sight) and reacting to his 'le ebin sick burns :kappa:' exactly how you'd expect them to react.
Then we get ourselves a wonderful little fight sequence after Glimmy's 'loss', where our good buddy Silver utilizes the full power of his not-Naruto superpowers to utterly obliterate her, and proceeds to laser-etch his fucking cutie mark on her forehead as his Orochimaru curse-seal, preventing her from saying a word about her "worthless and debunked Marksist ideology again" (sic) and forcing her to fix every 'evil' timeline she was in, along with aping I, Robot in the process. Personally, my favourite takeaway from the entire fight had to be his spell that "converts almost all physical damage to mental and emotional damage" (sic). Fucking poetry.
Congrats, Nigel. You've successfully made me feel completely at peace with my abysmally bad first attempts at writing when I was just starting out years ago. From the bottom of my heart, I thank you for that truly edifying experience. Such noble acts won't go unrewarded in my house, so take these Barbie Glim-glams with all of my blessings. May you never improve, siha. ~♥
Anonymous
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Here's a strange question. If I listened to the people calling this story the worst thing ever, how would I improve?
Anonymous
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No.3578
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>>3577
There are a fuckton of ways to improve. Hell there are hundreds, if not thousands of guides on the internet (even some on fimfiction). This website is not your personal writing improvement guide, nor is it a place to shill your work (unless you're good and unless it relates to the discussions in this board at hand) so fuck off and get better before coming back here with your shit.
Anonymous
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No.3579
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>>3577
The consensus is pretty clear that your self-insert Mary-sue OC (with all his sooper-ebin powurz) should be the first thing to be addressed. After that, a legitimate portrayal of FiM characters would be a step in the right direction. Low-effort cross-series references and inclusions do not increase the depth of the story/characters, it makes it more superficial. Get ready for the next part.

Your narrations are good. They effectively invoke the images of the show, and allow the user to picture the characters in action. That's where you succeed. However, allowing the viewer to accurately visualize FiM scenarios and then scripting those characters to act disproportionately to their established persona is counter-productive. It makes the reader (not all of course) think "This isn't MLP, this is some shitty spinoff that only vaguely resembles MLP. At least he got the names right."

I think if you stick to canon characters, or if the included OC isn't teh most awesomester Dr. Nar-Who-to Goku Firebender Masterest Sorcurrurr, then you might have something.
Anonymous
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>>3578
After reading leaf's synopsis I am absolutely apalled you would even ask such a question as "how can I improve." By using a character who has established personality traits you have trapped yourself. Do your research or make a new commie. The first thing you absolutely must learn is to actually get in the head of an SJW. Not only the what but the motivations behind it and the philosophy that leads to it. Second, if you write out a debate, you should write it from that mindset. Bonus points if you keep to the motivations that Glimmer has in-show, for added authenticity.

Of course that assumes a desire to create a story of some narrative consistency which is the bare minimum.

This advice is important for both fictional and real debates: know your enemy. If you want to convert a commie, you need to find out their reasons for being one and show them that things can and have been better under capitalism, fascism, or democratic republic. When a commie accuses a rich man of hoarding enough money to cure homelessness, tell them that economic disparity propels the working poor upward and gives jobs to the jobless, whereas forced minimum wages make people less capable of hiring. That kind of thing.

Honey, not vinegar. You get nowhere by waving your arms around declaring your opponent has abandoned lawjick like Sye Ten Bruggenkate. Anyone can make blanket statements like this without evidence and it puts the other side into a combative situation of raising their voice and making a spectacle. That may convert a few fence sitters but changing the heart of your opponent is so much harder than that.

TL;DR, the first step to writing a debate is not to lie or demonize, and the second step is to realize literally nobody likes listening to ceaseless insults without substance. I get sick of hearing cuck or commie and I'm as opposed to gommunism and nu-males as can be.
Anonymous
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No.3581
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>>3572
>mock the idea of racism and fascism being bad things
>gets called an sjw

lmao lurk moar. Take like five minutes reading Alternative Hypothesis or Jared Taylor before you pimp your fanfiction on a site dedicated to securing the existence of our people and a future for white children.
Anonymous
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>This Thread
Anonymous
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No.3583
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>>3578
There isn't really a point for me to take you seriously. Not if you can't make an argument.
>>3579
Thank you, this is a good post. The part about the characters, I'll focus on that. I know the OC looks awesome now, but personality-wise, I had to give him personality flaws I don't have, so I could make him more interesting. I know "Thinks he is flawless" sounds like something an asshole would say, but I'm just... not an asshole. I don't have mental landmines that, when pushed, make me explode. The only problem I really have is with constantly assuming the worst of everyone, but that's due to my upbringing and I work hard to deal with that flaw.
Anyway, the writing.
I find it difficult to really pin down who these canon characters are, and are supposed to be, with how inconsistently they are written in the show. Part of me says to ignore how characters act in episodes where they look or act like asshats, and episodes that are just written badly in general, but that doesn't leave me with a lot of episodes. I decided to rewatch S1 a while ago to re-familiarize myself with how these characters were when I fell in love with them and this world, but there are still a lot of things I just don't know about these characters. I don't know how Twilight would react to having someone go Extreme Home Improvement on her house, for example. I can guess, but I know my interpretation of these characters will be different to the interpretations of someone who loved all episodes, or loved different episodes, or considers the shit episodes to be as canon as the good ones.
>>3580
This is going to sound really sad, but everything pro-commie Glimmer said in that episode is something I've heard from an actual commie over the years. I'm not strawmanning them when I say the ones I know and dislike seriously think all humans are poorly-trained shit dogs who need a firm-handed all-powerful state to show them dhe wae.
Does it count as strawmanning if you're having a "humans are shit and the system must dominate them" ideology repeated by a pony? Because the idea of a commie pony who hates things integral to pony society and biology still doesn't sit well with me, even after all this time. The character had to go because her nonsensical mary sue status was harming the show and the plots that could be told with it(for example, how can you tell a story about two friends learning to get along and get better at something if glimmer is there to be the best ever?), and glimmer having her ass kicked by a weaker smarter guy seemed like a better solution than having her say "I must go, my planet needs me" and float off into space.
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>>3581
If you're wondering why I said fascism=communism in the chapter, it's so I can redpill confused people in the comments on the actual founder of fascism, some dumb leftist. Remember, the left are the real fascists.
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>>3583
>I know the OC looks awesome now [...] not an asshole
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Everypony is an asshole; You, me, and all the assholes in this thread and beyond. I seem to recall telling you that once before.
Having said, you make a valid point wrt the consistency of depicted characters. On the one hand, there are observable inconsistencies but I admit that while there were (plenty of) moments I felt the characters were inauthentic, I don't have any suggestions other than what you have described.. As far as your OC keeping it constructive here, consider nerfing him in some way so that the Mane 6 would have to come together to 'save' him or whatever, perhaps using the knowledge and experiences they have had since he's been around. New readers are predominantly going to approach a FiM fic expecting it to emphasize Mane, and any OC you decide to include (Silver, et al) should be considered the "Guest Star" who compliments the Mane characters and helps them to succeed, as opposed to being a Deus Ex Machina that just comes along and fixes everything cuz he's so awesome (again, Mary-sue). As one so powerful (think Celestia) he would probably be more fixated on helping others to grow in their power and ability rather than fixing everything himself, alluding to the concept of "Never do for someone else something that they are capable of doing for themselves." Basically, a mentor and guide rather than the main character.
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>>3585
You are not an asshole. And that sounds like a good idea, I'll do that.
Any other tips? I want to reveal Aquilla's(Silver's Griffon secretary and bodyguard) backstory at some point, but I'm not sure where it should go. Same goes for Silver, and how he went from weakling farmboy to awesome athletic muscle wizard.
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>not an asshole
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To your question, the only thing that comes to mind would be something equally/more powerful than Silver. It doesn't need to be a matter of power level either. In Naruto for example, its not always a matter of raw power, but technique and strategy that can win the fight. To avoid a mega-god battle, it would make more sense if the adversary/adversity was a group rather than an individual, and better still if it is an "Unknown type" of magic or effect. Off the top of my head, here's what I'm seeing.
Perhaps Aquilla received an urgent message for Silver, which might call on them (is Aquilla a female?) to investigate a geography that might allow you to expand on their backstory while leading toward the discovery of this new threat?
Another question to consider, when in the FiM story does all this take place? Is it pre-Tirek, for example? If post, then the Mane6 going super-saiyan could be an effective counter-balance to what Silver (or whoever) discovers.
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>>3586

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fbHKZdPXk3o

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>>3587
It follows canon up to the end of season 6, then it diverges and becomes this. Seasons 7 and 8 just contain too much BS. Other seasons also have BS but I can fix those.
Silver and Aquilla(who is female and a hawk-panther orphan Griffon who was raised by a pony family) have pretty cool backstories. Though Aquilla's is kind of short. Should I post it here, so I can get feedback on it? I sometimes feel like it's too short.
The Talismans from Jackie Chan inspired these magical tarot cards the heroes are supposed to look for and collect, and some bad guys are also looking for them and collecting them. A group of three Diamond Dogs got the first card that was revealed, the Strength card, which makes you the ultimate fighter. I thought it'd add to the stakes if the hero lost the first fight, even with all his power, and his ability to bluff them was the only reason they left.
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Inb4 OP becomes a lolcow.
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>>3590
That's such a stupid newspeak word.
What is a lolcow? A "cow" that you "milk" "lols" from.
And how do you "milk" laughter from a lolcow? By harassing him (and very rarely her, but usually him) and typing laughter and "smashing that MF crying laughing emoji" no matter what he responds with.
There are pedophiles in the DNC, and they get away with raping children because too many idiots are too busy being distracted by reality TV, or too busy distracting themselves with this nu "DIY reality TV" shit.
Is it really the worst thing in the world when some child, teenager, or adult does something "uncool" where the manchildren can see, upsetting said manchildren? White Americans and Brits are still discriminated against in their own homes and academia is still being used to propagandize children for the benefit of libtards, so I'm going to have to say no.
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>OP becomes a lolcow.

Glimmernigel is showing all the marks that distinguish a regular mortal from a prime lolcow. Ever since i first encountered him here this only exaggerated. It is time for this bovine to make his degree at the steak university. All it takes is that someone like Fake Vril or me officially put him on the index. He will be immortalized as a humeme who brought great shame to the Alt Brony community.

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>>3593
Name my crimes. Or rather, let me know what you consider crimes. Let me know why you think I've brought great shame to "Your" community, since I'm apparently also the guy who stopped your Glimmer-spamming raid on this website around a year ago, the guy who was also one of this website's first members. Let me know why you think "I" need to go on your liberal-style "Wall of shame" as a strawmanned caricature of someone you despise for ruining your idea of fun.

Also, can you let me know why you feel the need to turn this fanfic-discussing thread into a childish IdPol shouting match where you identify as the leaders and protectors and inquisitors of the alt-right and proceed to identify me as an "enemy of the alt-right" who must be "punished" through being called bad names on the board you could be using to dig up dirt on liberal Senators and other liberal politicians instead? Because there's a pretty big difference in post quality when it comes to the people offering feedback and advice on improving ny craft, and the wannabe- Comissar infiltrators trying to pretend they're not just alt-right, but also people "alt-right" enough to decide who the community "needs" to turn against.