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HAPPENING: Car Of Peace Attack in Waukesha
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>Now the barbarians that hate #America are trying to take #Christmas from us, BY MURDERING #CHRISTIANS IN BROAD DAYLIGHT.
>This was in Waukesha, Wisconsin, TODAY.
Found at https://gab.com/DemsFearTruth/posts/107318100052060184
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This was memory holed long enough for them to blast that white kids parents all over the media

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RANDOM NEWS - Thread #6
The old thread >>301564 → hit the bump limit.
Post random news here.
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The network of collaborators in a public and private payroll is vast.

Glim Glam's Neverending Flim Flam: Caught in an Eternal Loop of Shitty Fiction Edition
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Hi, I'm Glim Glam. You may remember me from such threads as "Peen Stroke, we Hardly Knew Ye" and "Fallout Equestria: the only thing more painful than dilating an infected taint-wound." I've returned once again for another long-winded review of a decade-old fanfic.

>What is this?
This is a literary review thread for pony fanfiction. We take an MLP fic, read through it, and shit all over it discuss its various strengths and flaws.

>Why are you doing this?
Amusement, boredom, pomposity; take your pick.

>Do I have to read the actual fic to follow along?
Not necessarily, but reading the story concurrently along with the thread might give you a better understanding of what I'm talking about. I usually try to provide a clear synopsis of what's going on and quote directly from the text where applicable, but I can't guarantee that my summary will be 100% accurate or clear.

>Doesn't this thread violate the "no generals" rule?
Probably, but does anyone really care at this point?

As ever, discussion of the story is encouraged from those reading the thread. I encourage anons to share their own views and to dispute any of my opinions/takes if they disagree.

Previous Thread:
>>311564 →

Current Story:

The Best Night Ever
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>Prince Blueblood thought the Grand Galloping Gala was over. He thought he could just go to sleep and put it behind him. He never expected to be reliving the same disaster of a day, over and over... and over.
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>A certain measure of sloth aside, Prince Blueblood was not a foal. Nor was he ignorant of the magic that was his birthright. There was something truly strange going on. This meant that it was best to observe, for the moment, so as to formulate a proper response. What happened before – and he felt a little sick thinking of things in this kind of weird "loop" – surely couldn't and wouldn't repeat itself if he just removed himself from the picture. Perhaps doing so would also reveal some clue? Perhaps doing so would just fix things by chance!
This paragraph is also a bit murky. The meaning I'm taking from this is that Blueblood, being both a unicorn and Equestrian royalty, would have a basic familiarity with magic, and might have guessed that some kind of enchantment could be responsible for the weird situation he's in. However, it's not clear just how much he's supposed to have figured out.

This jumps out at me:

>What happened before – and he felt a little sick thinking of things in this kind of weird "loop" – surely couldn't and wouldn't repeat itself if he just removed himself from the picture.
Is the word "loop" implying that Blueblood has figured out that time is literally repeating itself here, or is this just a figure of speech? If the former, then how exactly did he figure this out? If the latter, then what exactly does he think is going on?

This is one of those areas where adapting a story from one universe to another can be tricky. In GHD, Bill Murray's character is an ordinary human, living in the ordinary human world. In the ordinary world, time doesn't just suddenly start repeating itself in an infinite loop. Because the situation he finds himself in is impossible, Bill Murray is initially skeptical about what is happening to him. Again, it's been awhile since I've seen the movie, but as I remember it takes him a day or two to finally accept that he's stuck in a time loop. His instinctive reaction is to disbelieve what he knows to be impossible, even though the impossible is clearly happening, and he can only accept the situation once he has completely exhausted all rational explanations (he hit his head, he's having a dream, he is the victim of an elaborate prank, etc).

However, in Equestria, things are a little different. Magic is an accepted part of everyday life here, and it stands to reason that when something is quite obviously out of the ordinary, a spell or an enchantment is probably at the root of the problem. Thus, Prince Blueblood would have a much easier time accepting the idea of being stuck in a time loop than Bill Murray would. So, based on the information he has at his disposal so far, what would he most likely be thinking is going on right now? It's worth putting thought into questions like this.

Anyway, BB goes outside to the menagerie. Or, wait a minute...

>The Ménagerie was a series of prominent rooms and adjoining salons. Each of the main chambers was named for a prominent constellation, the very same one that adorned the ceiling of each hall in the form of a great mural. Facing North was the Bear, East the Scorpion, and West the Hound. Within each individual Ménagerie, the walls were decked in the finest tapestries and frescoes, the most elegant of marble statues were on display, and stained-glass windows provided a rich ambiance.
I'm not sure Capn_Chryssalid understands what a menagerie is. A menagerie is basically a private zoo, where a king or an extremely wealthy person will keep a collection of exotic pets. When the text said "menagerie" I assumed it meant the outdoor garden where Fluttershy wanted to go to make friends with the critters. Here, the author seems to be treating it as some kind of indoor cluster of sitting rooms or something.

It's possible that the menagerie has been repurposed into "rooms" and "salons" for the Gala, but I don't think that's what's going on. For one thing, you probably wouldn't want to have a lot of expensive tapestries and statues and stained glass windows and so forth in a place where you normally keep your pet elephants, even temporarily. Also, over the next few paragraphs, Blueblood proceeds through several "rooms" of the menagerie, and there is no mention of any exotic animals present, or any sign that they were ever present. So, I'm going to conclude that the author's use of the word is incorrect. This is a pretty big blunder; if you're going to use a word, you should at least make sure you know what it means and that you're using it correctly. Google is a thing. Also, one of the earlier author's notes mentioned that someone named "RB Dash" edited this text. This kind of giant, flashing red error is exactly the sort of thing an editor is supposed to catch, so this one is as much on Dash as it is on the author.

Anyway, Blueballs wanders around the "menagerie" for awhile. In one of the rooms, a "neon-pink mare whose legs seemed to have been replaced with springs" is causing a scene. Once again, I will note that I like the way the author is showing us the scene through the eyes of his character. We all know the pony he's referring to here clearly it's Bulk Biceps, but it stands to reason that Blueblood would not know her by name and probably doesn't care who she is all that much. So, even though a fan would immediately recognize this character and attribute significance to her, she is still simply being described as an irrelevant background presence, because that's how BB would see her. Learning to write from the perspective of your character rather than your own perspective or that of the reader is one of the best writing habits you can fall into, and it's one of the things that most of the fanfiction authors we've looked at seem to struggle with.

>Plus, just how could an earth pony be involved in anything like... this... whatever this was?
I will once again note that it's not clear what BB thinks is going on. Is he assuming magic? Does he still think it's a prank?

Anyway, BB keeps wandering around. He encounters a "food vendor" selling "common fare" that doesn't appeal to him. He seems to have had some sort of encounter with her the previous evening. Once again, it's clear enough who this pony is, but again, the author is doing a good job of keeping the point of view limited to what his protagonist would naturally be aware of. So, for the moment, the food vendor remains a background pony :^).

Nothing else really happens. It's still a bit murky what BB thinks of the situation, but he seems to at least suspect that he is actually reliving the previous day. This suspicion seems to be confirmed when a herd of critters (the first mention of animals we've heard, despite his ostensibly being in a menagerie) rampages through the Gala and ruins it. Blueblood notes with annoyance that his Aunt Celestia has once again disappeared.

He retires to his chambers in an uneasy state, and the scene ends.

Page break. Blueblood awakens to the same song as before, and hits the snooze button on his radio. He climbs out of bed, and summons his servants to dress and groom him as he did the previous day.

>On a lark, he spoke to the servant fillies this morning.
>"The Gala is tonight." He stated it with a sigh. "Isn't it?"
If I'm following this correctly, this should only be his second repeat, yet he seems to have already more or less comprehended what's going on and accepted it. Depending on how the author is thinking about it, this might be because of what I mentioned earlier: BB lives in a world of magic, and thus would not find the idea of being placed under a time-loop spell to be as incomprehensible as a human living in our world would. It still feels slightly odd to me that he would be this blasé about it this early in the story, but I suppose we'll see where the author is taking it.

>Blueblood felt a shiver run through his frame as he entered the dining hall, and saw everyone just where they were before. Eating the same things as before. Chatting about the same things as before.
This seems to imply that the opposite is true: that BB has no idea what is going on and that he's freaked out about it. If I were to give the author any advice at this juncture, it would be that he should pick a state of mind for Blueblood and hold to it for the first couple of loops, then move him progressively through different states as the story progresses and he learns more about what is happening to him.

>A servant came by, and he placed an order for tea, with milk and ginger. A dish of freshly imported yucca. It was tasty in and of itself, but it was refined and expensive. He had been hoping to start a trend with it. He also had a cliens doing business in the plant. There was that, too, but it also brought back pleasant memories.
It seems illogical that he would be thinking about something this trivial right now. Also, what is a "cliens?"

>"I trust you are looking forward to this Evening's Gala? I have heard you hired from the Canterlot Chamber Orchestra company? I look forward to their rendition of Entry of the Princess in Sun's Light."
>"It should be quite fitting," he replied, glancing across the long table. "Once the Princess shows up, and if nothing goes wrong before that."
>Strangely, Princess Celestia choose that moment to cover a small smile with a sip of tea, one of her ears twitching.
>Ah-ha! Blueblood wanted to yell. Either you know what's going on, or you planned that mischief in the first place! Ah-bloody-ha!
As far as I can tell, BB is still assuming that this is some kind of elaborate prank being played on him by Celestia. That probably makes sense enough considering the characters and setting; Celestia would have the means to orchestrate a large-scale prank that required participation from everyone in the castle, and would also probably have the magic power to cast a spell if she wanted to do it that way, so she's probably the most logical suspect right now.

We've probably read enough at this point that I can stop and sum up what I think of it so far.

Of the things we've read, this text is probably the most well constructed. At the moment, it is the frontrunner for "least objectionable fanfic I've read and reviewed," by a wide margin. As I've remarked, the author does a good job of writing from the character's perspective, the pacing is good, and he's given us a pretty clear image of what kind of person pony, whatever this Prince Blueblood is.

If I have any major criticism so far (apart from the somewhat stiff prose and the menagerie thing), it's that, while the Blueblood character is developed enough thus far, I don't find his behavior entirely believable. Namely, I find the way he's reacting to the time-loop business to be a little unconvincing thus far.

For people learning to draw, one of the most important things to learn is how to proportion different parts of the body. Even if you can draw everything else perfectly, if you've drawn a character whose arms are too long, or their head is too small, or whatever, anyone looking will notice that something is off, even if they can't put their finger on what it is. The same applies to human pony, whatever behavior in writing.

In an effort to pinpoint what it is about BB's behavior that feels off here, I'd point to a familiar psychological model, the Five Stages of Grief:


This model describes the emotional states a person goes through when confronted with sudden loss or the prospect of their own death, and I've found it's a helpful model to use when trying to predict how a character might react to any sort of life-altering event over which they have no apparent power. Running out of space, will continue.

Let's take a look at Prince Blueblood's situation through this lens.

Blueblood, for reasons yet unknown, finds himself reliving the same day over and over. How might he react?

Obviously, this situation is impossible. A person doesn't just live the same day over and over again, so this can't be happening. This is either a trick, or there is something crucial that Blueblood is not understanding. The people around Bill Murray think he's a pretty weird guy, the way he keeps going around saying crazy things like "didn't we do this yesterday?" and "what kind of trick are you trying to pull on me?"

After a few loops, as the reality of his situation becomes apparent, Blueblood begins to lash out at the world around him. As I recall, Bill Murray's character in GHD went through a similar period, where he was just doing wacky shit because he knew it wouldn't matter the next day.

This would probably be the period where Blueblood calms down and realizes that mindlessly fucking with the world around him over and over isn't going to fix anything. He begins looking at it as some kind of puzzle that needs to be solved. Surely there must be some reason this is happening. There must be something he can do, some sin he can atone for or some deed that he can accomplish, and if he can just figure out what it is, then whatever force is imprisoning him will set him free.

At this point, Blueblood has concluded that the time loop is both real and inescapable; he has no further delusions about being able to "break" the loop through some specific action on his part. The realization that he is doomed to endlessly repeat the same day over and over and over sinks in completely, and he despairs.

Having made his peace with his situation, Blueblood has now attained a sort of zen state. He is no longer attempting to control his destiny or escape the loop; he accepts the situation for what it is, and it no longer bothers him. In the Bargaining state, he likely ascertained that the time loop might be some sort of divine punishment for his selfish behavior, and was probably trying to do good deeds in the hope that it would free him from the loop. However, since he was performing these acts cynically with a self-serving goal, it didn't work. However, now, he has given up on the idea of freeing himself from the loop, and is simply changing himself out of a genuine desire to change. Bill Murray wins over Andie MacDowell not because he desires her or because he wants the time loop to end, he has simply grown to love her on his own, and she sees and accepts this. By giving up on solving the puzzle, he has managed to solve the puzzle. He is now released from the loop.

This is more or less how I remember Bill Murray's character progressing in GHD. First he doesn't believe that it's happening, then he starts doing crazy stuff, then he shifts focus and begins trying to win over Andie MacDowell's character by cynically manipulating her using his knowledge of events. He eventually becomes depressed, trying to repeatedly kill himself in a number of hilarious ways. Ultimately, he comes to terms with the situation as it is, and at this point his focus shifts from trying to escape to trying to help people in the town. He is eventually able to win Andie MacDowell's genuine affection, and at this point fate releases him from the time loop.

It's a little early to judge how closely this author intends to follow this model. However, I think one thing that feels off is that Blueblood seems to have jumped the gun on "acceptance." After only a single repeat, he seems to have concluded: "welp, I'm in a time loop; what should I do about it?" In any case, though, let's keep reading and see what happens.

Page break. Blueblood has requested a private audience with Celestia, and confides in her that he is living the same day over and over. Unsurprisingly, she doesn't believe him, and he is unable to convince her. She recommends that he see her personal physician. There is a second page break, and BB is told by the physician that there is nothing wrong with him. After a third page break, he is being examined by some sort of magic specialist, who again assures him that there is nothing wrong. The specialist asks if he wouldn't rather be attending the Gala, and Blueblood tells him where he can stick it.

Another page break. Blueblood awakens to the sound of Equestria Girls by Sapphire Shores on his clock radio incidentally, are clock radios a thing in MLP? It's not really an issue as long as the author maintains a consistent setting, but I'm curious if it's a detail that occurred to him. I know they have phonographs, but I'm not sure if anything like radio broadcasts canonically exist.

He summons his servants as usual, but this time he decides to try talking to them a little. He asks them their names, and learns that they are called Light Touch and Sandy. Sandy doesn't talk much; it's not clear if she's mute or just shy.

Page break. Fast forward to the Gala, which he has decided to attend tonight. Whatever negative impression the mystery mare he keeps mentioning might have made on him during his first Gala experience, he seems inclined to try interacting with her again tonight. We still don't have a name for her, however.

>She look the part.
She looked the part. I haven't made a big deal out of it, but I've noticed a couple of minor errors like this here and there. For the most part the author's mechanics seem pretty good, so I'm assuming these are mostly typos. Everyone makes mistakes, so it's not really on the author; however, it reflects rather poorly on his editor.

BB observes Twilight Sparkle hanging around Celestia, and wonders cynically if she's hoping to achieve some kind of status boost by doing this. He then turns his attention to the mystery mare, and we finally get a name for her - Rarity.
>I was always taught that the latter method was correct: if someone's name ends in 's', you add a trailing apostrophe to make it a possessive. However, I looked it up, and it seems I've been doing this wrong for about 30 years. The trailing apostrophe only applies if the noun in question is plural

The way you learned it applies only if both the name and the object adjoin with 's':
>the iris' striations
>Hitchens' shark
>the meme Loss' suitability

Perhaps I got it wrong, but the way English is, double-s is okay but three or more is a no-go (there's the last example, but that's how the words are structured). Quite interesting.

I think I was the one who suggested this fic way back when, but it's awkward to check now. Anyway, I hope this is a good palate cleanser. There's another GHD-inspired fic where Twilight fights off changelings, but I find Best Night Ever to both be better-written and have less le edge.

Global Dictactorship
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Liberal democracies are imposing an accelerating trend of suppressing civil liberties under the guise of a fictitious epidemic.
Governments blackmail, coercion, threats and violence are going off the charts.
It looks like they are following a detailed plan step by step to do it. At the end of that plot, the plandemic restrictions look like will converge with the Climate Change hoax to reshape society and install officially slavery under the New World Order (NWO) brand.
This thread aims to document and map governments hostile actions, their actors, and The People' struggle for Freedom.
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>Neil Oliver: Governments amount to hundreds, we amount to millions - they are few and we are many
>HILARIOUS! New Anthem “Stick Your Vaccine Mandate Up Your ASS” is Spreading Like Wildfire (VIDEO)
>Along with “Let’s Go Brandon,” a new anthem “Stick Your Vaccine Mandate Up Your ASS” is making a buzz online. Many people around the world have sung the anthem as a way of protesting the COVID-19 vaccine mandates.
are there violent lyrics?
if not we need to make them sing this instead

HAPPENING - Jews forgot to disable comments on their new propaganda film
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Get the fuck in here
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>(((Norman Weiss)))
>"More Subversive"
>who uses real magic to do fake magic pretending to be real magic,
> Silverman’s Candy even resembles her Wreck-It-Ralph character and she plays right into the sort of enthusiastic, high-energy dirtiness that has always been the comedian’s hallmark
lmao not even a little bit close. jews cant into charm except in rare circumstances. Just look at twilight sparkle, played by a jew as are other ponies, and just look at her VA episode suggestions. Holy shit what eye bleeding garbage.
Nazis aren't the best at that, nazi empires only arrise in response to overwealming attack, so they are in essence impossible to just "Create" artificially. Libtards are retarded but they do have a small measure of truth. The law of the jungle is that truth. The problem is they think they have the jungle under control, or worse, want you to believe they have the jungle under control. Nazi systems are jewish socialism schemes turned back on their makers. they are great for controlling retards in need of a big dick government slightly more gently inclined to fuck them in the ass. You know, everyone who wears a red trump hat unironically and thinks we have democracy. These kinds of idiots could benefit from a nazi society but nobody else. Is that a good thing? probably better than the alternative yes, but is it 100% self sustainable? hell no. You cannot build a sustainable society based on the NPC, who wishes to fuck and consume and produce nothing in harmony with nature/the jungle.

The jews at their most inhumane ironically have a sliver of truth. The current great reset is heresy of the highest order but a reset of sorts does need to happen. We do need to keep the population low. It would be nice if there was a eugenics program to keep rifraff like me and others from polluting the gene pool with more npcs. The problem has always been that the only people brave enough to implement such things are almost all psychopathic satanists.

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The Great Reset.
Basically, the Great Reset isn’t so much a plan in itself as it is a description of many other plans that have already been put into action. It’s the thing that patriots have been describing all these months since the coronavirus conspiracy began: Elites and Jews want to strip you of all your rights, create a global government, end private property, make you live in a pod and eat bugs while surviving on “UBI” credits that are awarded to a computer chip in your hand. The world government wants to be a public-private partnership between the UN and multinational corporations. These corporations will become feudal powers and they’ll basically own portions of the population that live in their pods, eat their bug rations and take their sleeping pills.
The “Great Reset” is just explaining all that like it’s going to be great.
It is important, because they are literally saying they’re going to end private property. The Jews literally plan to destroy Christianity and Western Civilization, and enslave you. The New World Order is here.
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>they better start dropping bodies quick, or theyre finished.
I believe that's the plan. The GOP will come to the rescue and as usual will stab its voters in the back again, and of course with minimal cuckservative resistance.
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>The Only Way To Stop The Great Reset
>Catherine Austin Fitts Podcast - The Trueman Show #51
>Non-essential Humans! A.I Grocery packing warehouse in London
Yup, another Great Replacement is on its way.

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The old thread >>318141 → hit the bump limit.
Post Corona-Chan stuff here.
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Batshit crazy covidian.
>he thinks there are going to be survivors.
>i-it wont go further
cmon faggot, why do you think they are doing us last? theyre going to bring every zogged military over here. they might even stage a hot war to make it easier.

Jewish crime thread
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"Kill! Kill! In the German race there is nothing but evil; not one among the living, not one among the yet unborn but is evil! Follow the precepts of Comrade Stalin. Stamp out the fascist beast once and for all in its lair! Use force and break the racial pride of these German women. Take them as your lawful booty. Kill! As you storm onward, kill, you gallant soldiers of the Red Army." - Ilya Ehrenburg, Jewish USSR Propagandist. Since JQ shit is clogging the threads in the catalog, bring it back here. Let's start with some awe-inspiring and inspirational quotes from the Jewish rabbis, shall we?

"The gentiles will want to be our slaves. Being a slave to a Jew is the best. They’re glad to be slaves, they want to be slaves, Instead of just walking the streets and being stupid and violent and harming each other, once they’re slaves, their lives can begin to take shape." - Rabbi Eliezer Kashtiel https://archive.is/raZsR

"According to Jewish law, gentiles should not live in the Land of Israel. “If a gentile does not agree to take on the seven Noahide Laws, we should send him to Saudi Arabia. When the true and complete redemption arrives, that is what we will do, If our hand were firm, if we had the power to rule, that’s what we should do. But the thing is, our hand is not firm, and we are waiting for the Messiah." - Rabbi Yitzchak Yosef https://archive.is/MnnXQ

"Goyim were born only to serve us. Without that, they have no place in the world; only to serve the People of Israel. Why are gentiles needed? They will work, they will plow, they will reap. We will sit like an effendi and eat, with gentiles, it will be like any person: They need to die, but God will give them longevity. Why? Imagine that one’s donkey would die, they’d lose their money. This is his servant. That’s why he gets a long life, to work well for this Jew" - Rabbi Ovadia Yosef https://archive.md/lhc7Y
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Rick Heskey 4 Years in Prison. Another Christian taken prisoner by the jews.
Only two rabbis have seats in the House of Lords; there are other religious ministers, but they are all Christian.
>but they are all Christian.
They're not. They are freemasons and zionists. Freemasonry is cult following talmudic sorcery teachings.
Won't ever happen. The start of BDS repilled large numbers of normies into understanding that kikes will always scapegoat their weakest members, thus falsely creating 'support' for their kapparot reflex. If you break the jew's jaw, he can no longer speak.

Writefag Circle
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Welcome. This thread is for you Anons who wishes to improve your writing or just chill among Anons that do.
This is suppose to be a chill af thread. It's fine if it becomes a slider thread. I'll only make a new one of these if there is intrest.

>What is the need for this thread when we already have Glimglam's review thread and Anonfilly?
Compared to Glimglam's thread this thread is about what we Anons will or want to create. The only reviewing that might happened here is incidental, as in providing critic to some other work through comparison with the work at hand, and when one Anon tells another what his opinions of their work is.
This thread is first and foremost about producing stories.
This cannot be done in the Anonfilly thread since it is about Anonfilly first and foremost.

>Why a thread like this? Cannot we just have threads pop up organically because an Anon chose to post a green?
Yes, you are right. And this thread is absolutely not against other threads that circle around a singular story made by an Anon.
What this thread really is, is a form of support group for anyone wanting to write but are struggling with something in their writing process, like myself.
I thought it would be a good idea to talk to other Anons who also have similar goals about our stories and are struggling in creating them. Maybe, you struggle on something I don't and maybe I struggle on something you don't and therefore we can provide advice to each other on how to overcome our problems? Maybe some mysterious wise Anonsage lurks and our discussion prompts him to tell us his method he gained from meditating on top of K2 for five years without chicken tendies.

As stated before this is relaxed thread. If you like the thread, you don't have to pressure yourself into posting something to bump it. If anyone would like a continuation of it, I'll post a new one if it hits the archive. It's also okay to get off topic sometimes as well. I understand that conversations can lead to tangents and that it can be a relief finding someone else to talk to about things with, especially if few shares the perspective. If things get out of hand, I, or someone else, will ask you to kindly take this discussion to another thread or more fitting board, even perhaps. As an actual sugguestion, not a hidden insult. You and another Anon might discover something really intresting to talk about so why not create a thread about it?
Memetexts are, of course, welcomed.
Also, you don't have to share your problems if you don't want to. If you feel like telling us about your story that's enough. Story ideas can be really intresting to listen to and it might help you in return. Again, only do that if you want to.

So that's about it for the thread's header. The rest that follows is about me.

Right now, I thought about making the most simplest story I could think off. It's a simple hero's journey story. I do this because of two reasons. First off, I wanna know that I can start a project and see it to the end. I have only succeeded in finishing short stories before, you see, so this time I wanna try something longer. I also wanna keep it simple so that I don't get overwhelmed during the process of writing it.
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Well, on the matter of the musical cow addition that is.
I wanted the villain's "I am evil, but also fuck you" speech to be memorable so I made it a terrible rap.
That should help it stick in the audience's mind, right?
Thank you. Ive spelled it out in detail many moons ago, before even the Glimglam threads. For your consideration, Ill say it again, nicely. The issue is, whether something is 'cool' (read: useful, thoughtful, provocative, thrilling, tense, exciting, etc ad nauseum) or not is to do with its literary function, and not its concept. It's a waste of effort to ask in advance if the audience will be receptive to this or that, because the audience doesnt honestly know. I cite the absurd virality of Squid Game as exhibit A.
If it (the story) were written well or made to be compelling, it doesnt fucking matter what actual story element is introduced; if its made entertaining, it can literally be paint drying.
Asking if the idea is good before presenting it to the ultimate determining pary (the audience) is putting the cart before the horse.
>That should help it stick in the audience's mind, right?
Sure, it's not like you can't do it like that but this post >>327845
makes a great point regarding that question. The whole idea that the execution of an idea/premise is more important then the premise itself. Sure, some ideas are better than others and the execution can be seen as a string of ideas but you get the point.

Another point I'd like to make is that while Disney movies with villain songs made them more memorable then not, it has it's drawbacks. One fact is that the tension from immersion is dropped because if the villain breaks into song, our suspension of disbelief breaks. It's not bad but it depends on the story you're trying to tell. Breaking the tension might be good thing to do at times in a childrens' story. As not to scare the children by bringing in a lighter tone. Maybe? I don't actually know.

Having your villain sing a song were she exposit her motivation and probably background story isn't as effective, imo, as illustrating her motivation through somekind of subtle and 'showing' scene. So I think that rule applies here as well, "Show, don't tell." Essentially it's not as convincing to the audience when you just have her tell you why she does what she does instead of us seeing why she feels the way she does. Of course, I'm kinda using the classical tragical villain backstory as a template for my thoughts here but this idea but it should be applicable to other types of villains as well.

We reached bump limit on old thread and there is still news regarding Kyle Rittenhouse.
So I welcome you to the Kyle Triel continuation "Life Begins Again"

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I have a good source telling me kyle is in Costa Rica right now taking it easy. Should be getting back to USA soonish if not already. Touching down in the land of the free in Texas.
I'd rather not say where, and I didn't ask when. Likely to be going hunting after that.
I'll try to help keep him from ending up being a Q-quack or a trump troll, but donno if I'll get to interact with him at all. I can say he does have at least some good friends.
>you know a guy?
knows a guy who knows a guy, more like... consider this a 'street source', but it should be good. It's not like Kyle is trying to hide... I don't think anyway.
I just found out about it today.
He cucked again. No Gab account.