>>315109>I gotta ask though, what kind of rhythm is it that's not present in this work that is present in my other ones?
Usually I think of your writing as very goal-focused. You almost mechnically warp from plot point to plot point. This is both good and bad, in my opinion. I't important to note that this might al be wrong and it's just my limited opinion.
It's good because you don't waste you're readers time and you stay focused on what you want to write about. It's bad when the scenes feel elementary and not developed, I guess. character's dialogue can feel stiff if they. in the high-pacing. are basically just saying, "Go here and do this," and when descriptions of things are low it can be more "Character A does this and now she is finished."
I basically believe that pacing is basically the decision on where you spend your words in the story. The places that matter the most should have the most words to emphasize their importance.
This is a problem I have with my opwn writing or rather I have the opposite problem from what I have thought you had: My pacing is that of a snail.
At the begining of my writing "career" I took the rule, "Show don't tell," as gospel and now I can't tell in stories anymore. But telling isn't bad in itself, sometimes its good to summarize events to the reader instead of describing them.
Take scene transitions for example. It's nice like you do in this sory to give them a little bit of descriptive flavour but not to slow down the pace of you story with paragraphs on paragraphs of descriptions add on the story. Sometimes this works though, it all depends on the context of what you're trying to tell. "In the Shadow of Innsmouth," for example is the buss ride to innsmouth very long and descriptive, kinda like how some rollercoasters slowly climbs up their highest hill first -- It's spooky!
I do the opposite of this anyway. If I have a scene were a man is suppose to show an officer his passport, instead of writing like a normal person, "He showed the officer his passport," I paint you a picture of this trivial scene.
I can't speak for other people, so maybe this is more common than I think, but I have a very vivid imagination. What I write is that I have had clear images of in my head. So in situation like this, I see the scene and I immediately go, "So where does he pull that passport out from." Then I go, "His inner jack pocket." "But wait, didn't I write earlier that he closed his jacket? Also, People usually use the other hand that's not unzipping the jacket to hold on of the hems in place."
The end result becomes something like this,
With one hand he pulled down the zipper of his black jacket and with the other tugged in one of the hems. The zipper goes brrrr
. After the jacket is open, he stretch out his jacket like a batwing and snakes his other hand into the jacket's innerpocket. His fingers dig there for a while before he fishes up his wallet. He flips the flaps aside and then drag his nails over his many cards tightly squeezed together in a pocket before his mental counting reach seven. At that point, he pinches the card currently under his nail and start to pinch it between the card next to it and your nail as you slowly push it out. When the car is out, you hold it between your pointer- and your longfinger and reach it out to the officer with a smirk on your face.
I never felt as there was too little or too much throughout your entire story here. You had perfect pacing with this story, I think.
Having said that though I do think that different styles offer different perspective. Occult Facade's style pushes the reader to infer a lot of stuff. I kinda like it and I think it's important to remember that different styles can work for different reasons. I think it's good to trust oneself in one's judgement on whether not something is good or not in one's writing.>>315116
I guess, it doesn't matter that much who we people are but the context here was if people could detect others based on their writing style. >Stop digging up 4 year old drama
You don't have to worry. There's no drama being dugged up here what so ever.>>315120
I didn't mean you were argentina anon I meant that he is the same from /vx/ I believe. But I wrote that in a very confusing way though so it's understandable.>/10.