>>247228> I've been working intermittently on mine
Glad to hear.
Btw I'm sorry that I never made and audionovel of it. I wanted to but life got in the way.
I would rate your story seven fillies out of ten purples tbh. It is obivious from the begining that it will be a comedy story. It succeeds in this for the most part. What one doesn't know at that point is that it will become a good mysery novel aswell. The mystery is pretty good. It dos follow the give the reader all the piece before the conclusion formula, if I didn't make any mistakes somewhere. Though, this is true, all the pieces arrive late in the story so don't expect to solve the mystery right away.
There were only a few moments were a rolled my eyes, your main characters how everything is pointless spiel was one. But then again it does fit his chracter so it is technically well done. It is not you that is the problem it is me. Otherwise it was solid throughout. Would recomand.
I have been thinking though, you won't have any branching paths will you? I mean since it is based on this book that your wrote. Or have you added such paths to it?
Not that I'm complaining since I can see the charm with just a novel with pictures to it. I was just wondering.
>I will probably need others yet but I think this is most of the main cast (it's been about a year since I've looked at this story so I forgot a lot of what I wrote).
Well then, here are some more characters your mc interacts with. >Samantha>Her father >The milf lawyer that was in that one scene or actually two>The motel owner
>white male middle aged politician
"I'm the motherfucking valrus!"
I'm not sure if I think he was probably setup. Like I know you mentioned him in the story in passing and that was subtle and well done. Solid fooreshadowing! But that only foreshadowed that he existed basically.
Not the part of him that the public sees. Like if your mc had seen him holding a typical speech on tv. Have him say a bunch of platidudes there.
But again maybe you did show that somewhere in there and I simply don't remember.>>247231>Reaching an audience beyond /mlpol/ probably necessitates that you give a modicum of sympathetic perspective even if you lambaste their flaws.
I can understand you perspective. I think something similar abbout how to redpill people. There is basically three general ways in my opinion. Being straight with them and tell them exactly what you think and stand up for your beliefs. Well, ragardless of method ne should allways do this. Well, unless it is clearly detrimental???
Eh, the point is to show strength and not to be afraid of guilt by association. But in the way of giving ones message I guess one can also be subtle about it or presenting ones message like E;R so that people are unsure if you are serious or not.
Anyway, in the context of these characters it really doesn't make to much sense in changing them. They are kinda suppose to be shitheads. Their existance comments on the gansta niggas out there in the real world.
People how complain about this are hypocrites since they with compltete certainty don't complain when white men are bad guys in fiction.
Futhermore, these kindof people exist in the real world so it works as satire.
If one where to make a black character more sympathetic in the story it would be the black cop.
But again, this was kind unecessary of me since you knew this already. The question was about how to reach audinences outside of redpilled people.
I think that it is impossible to change this story to appeal to normies at this point. it would require a toral rewrite. However, I think it could reach liberals who are all about identity politics. At least some of them.
You know the type, watches Jordan pettersen and soygoy of mossad I haven't kept track of him but from what I have learnt he has changed somewhat.
You know the crowd who listen to efap that talks about games and the marvel movies and such. It is not that they are always wrong. It is just that they work as a false opposition because they don't have the entire picture.
Those kind of people are the ones that this story could potentially grab. Just because it is this sort of unapologetic and silly political satire with a tinge of autism mixed in.
Attached is the story he is makinga game of.