>>244970>Rather than focusing on what a Tabaxi is, I focus on what it is doing, and casually mention some of the creature's physical characteristics while I'm at it
It is interesting because that is the way I used to write. It is not seen in all my previous writing but it is something I have implemented in my writing before. Like you want to establish both that your character has white hair, take care of her appearance and what the character is currently doing, you write: ”She combed her white hair.” But I realize now that I moved away from that way of writting, almost subconciously, because I read someone on the internet critiscising that way of writting. They joked about the fact that the possessive form of the noun combined with the adjective gave a more identifying meaning. Like, ”Her white hair was combed, not her black hair cause it was being discriminated against.”
But yeah, when I think about it people evidently know what you are saying in context so I shouldn't care about such silliness.>>245040>The room was walked through
"He walked through the room" reads much less awkwardly.
Yes, I know. The reason I write like that is to avoid writing sentences like these, ”A went to the job. A eat on the job. A talked to B. A was given a ride home by B.”
I'm trying to do the whole switch between who/what is the object and who/what is the subject by switching from passive to active voice and vice versa. I'm trying to have my paragraphs flow from one sentence to another.
So instead of the previous example I write, ”A went to the job. On the job food was eaten by A. A talked to B. B gave A a ride home.”
Because that paragraph flows more than the first one but I guess that is for more academical writing and not for creative writing.
Sometimes I get a flow between sentences that do not have this structure they go something like this.Post too long. Click here to view the full text.