>>405648>I feel ashamed to write such a short response to your essayDw. To me, the words just spilled out. I just felt like telling you. Tho, I know exactly what you mean, and I feel the same when it happens to me. ^^
>image.Its a great improvement. Awesome image.
>LikeI like the details, how you moved the star of David to a place where it makes sense for it to be (there are even kippahs with the star on top like so), and I liked how parts of the star are hidden on the other side of the hat, showing how it's round.
I like how you can tell his hair is black and bushy, and how it goes around his bald spot like an olive wreath.
I like the bucks and the flags. Despite being small on his nice suit, I can tell what they are immediately.
I really like the face. It has this cartoon style to it. Where the nose takes up the left half of it, and the mouth is in the right corner (nice little tongue that is revealed to be tongue by the little shadow on the rope). Mm, I kinda forgot about my point here, but I meant to say the mouth, the giant nose(but really the angle), and how the male forehead bone sticks out to his left (can't forget the ear to the right) gives the face a sense of 3/4 view; however, the eyes aren't in 3/4 but are more straight ahead. This feels more like a style than a mistake to me. Kinda cartoony style imo.
>AdjustmentsThe new noose is way better, so don't get me wrong. But I still want to improve it slightly. We want to properly strangle him, and he probably won't get off, unless he is properly strangled as well, the sick freak. ^^
So there are two things that could add to this effect: One is having his chin overlap the rope. The rope is so tight that it basically disappears from view in the front and goes under his chin.
And two, the rope is straight now... You know what, I think it's just the first point. I was gonna say the knot should be tighter and closer to the neck, and the rope should be straight. However, this is already the case, I notice when I look closer. You just need to... Hmm. Maybe the whole body should be rotated slightly counterclockwise?
Tbh, Idk. Forget about it.
I'm a fraud who takes himself too seriously. Take everything I said with a grain of salt. The only thing worth remembering here, I think, is having the chin overlap the rope.
There is also the thing with the left leg. The kneecap is more pronounced than the foot. Basically, they are pointing in different directions. The kneecap is going 3/4 to full left side profile while the foot is going mostly forward with some foreshortening to the left. This makes the foot look slightly twisted.
My advice would be to either reduce the kneecap and add more of the calf on the right side of the left leg, or make the shoe more similar to the one on his right leg.
>Extra thoughtsI liked that you tried you hands at some hands. See how, while they aren't amazing, just their presence and balance add to the illusion enough.
I like them.
Obviously, his hands have four fingers, or three and one thumb(?). But that's not uncommon for cartoon characters and, honestly, for some reason, it feels fine to me as well.
His thumb is either wrong for the hand, or he is currently twisting his forearm into supination, which is hard to do when you are dead.
That's how easy it is to fall to the dark side: Critic snark. ^^ Anyway, as I said before, take everything I say with a bunch of salt, like you would if you fought a vampire slug. Tho, I do try to point out things, when I criticize, stuff that you might not have noticed yourself. Like my last point is about the footstool.
And while any criticism, that is well-meaning, would probably point this out, and again it would be constructive, there is also the aspect that if I take a moment to consider the situation, I know why your stool looks like it does.
You spent a lot of time making this guy, and even adding shadows and details. At this point, you are exhausted and want things to wrap up.
Right, he needs a stool or something that he had been standing on before. Let's just draw one. And you ended up drawing one that looks like a wood version of the numerical pi. Obviously, the advice would be to add some 3d to it; however, since I know this only happened because of fatigue, I'm not gonna say that, or well, I already did, but I won't demand that.
However, I do think there is a moment here for improved storytelling. Because now he is hanged. But was it suicide or was he hanged by someone else? If he hanged himself, I feel sort of bad for him. If he were executed, I would have a much easier time believing he deserved it. Maybe you should add a boot that kicks the stool away. idk.